Paul was cereal: part XXVII

27 February 2009

[this box of Smacks was opened on 1 February]

 

 

Paul was remembered for getting lost in middle school. Walking up through the woods during recess. When he didn’t return for class Steve said Paul was at the Nurse’s Office.

 

Expecting to complete the task. 10 minutes up, 5 minutes down. Always failing with a sale, this is expected. Maybe one success a day.

 

& all the noise around, ringing, pitching, chanting, a ball bouncing around a group & never settling for a second, dialtone, becomes white, reassuringly empty.

 

The progression|digression meaning. Less.

 

A record of the night before in pulled & twisted sheets. Remade. Tucked under.

 

Rewrite the same story for several days. But it is a new story each time. With the same sentences.

 

To prove her sayings wrong, he left. “A creature of habit” that leaves the factory floor, family, & drives. West.

 

After a while all faces fade. Just voices. Ringing.

 

Has the serial form enhanced the story? Will Paul find his way through the words?  

 

Tune in tomorrow for the finale — Part XXVIII of “Paul was cereal”

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  • 2. ctiefel  |  4 May 2009 at 5:24 pm

    I like this one.

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